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The graph below shows the average monthly use of health club in Miami and Florida by all full-time members in 2017. The pie charts show the age profile of male and female members of this health club. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words. Health club use in Miami and Florida in 2017

The graph below shows the average monthly use of health club in Miami and Florida by all full-time members in 2017. The pie charts show the age profile of male and female members of this health club. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words. Health club use in Miami and Florida in 2017
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The bar
chart
 illustrates the usage of
health
club
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clubs
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Miami
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in Miami
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 and Florida in 2017 which is divided by
genders
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gender
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. The pie
chart
 shows
male
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males
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 and
female
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females
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 registered
to
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for
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health
club
membership
 separated by
age
. When considered together there is no correlation between the two sets of data. There was a fluctuation
occur
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in 2017
Miami
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in Miami
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 and Florida
health
club
 use, but men always be the majority
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the
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health
club
user
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users
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. The highest peak of the
health
club
 usability for men happened
on
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 June 2017, approximately there were 850
health
club
 users in
this
 month. For
female
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females
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, the most
health
club
user
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users
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 happened in August and September which were about 720 monthly users. For male
membership
, the majority of
member
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members
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 were in
21
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the 21
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-45
age
groups
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group
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for
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donating
of
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55% of the total male
membership
 program.
On the other hand
, the smallest
age
group
 that
were
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joined the male
membership
 were
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the others
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others
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other
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age
group
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groups
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 that
were consist
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 of outside
21
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the 21
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-45 and
65+
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the 65+
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age
group
 gave about 20%
from
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of
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 the total male
membership
.
This
 situation
found
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 in
female
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the female
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membership
 program, 21-45
age
 groups
donate
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donated
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 about 50% and
others
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other
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age
group
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groups
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donate
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donated
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 19%%
from
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of
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 the total female
membership
 In conclusion, the bar
chart
 and pie
chart
 did not correlate with each other because there were differences in both sets of data.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words chart, health, club, membership, age, group with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "sets" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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