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In the future, nobody will buy printed newspapers or books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying. To what extent do you agree or disagree with that statement? [813]

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The rapid technological innovation in
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 day and age has digitalized many aspects of life, including reading.
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 has given rise to heated arguments about whether anybody would buy printed media in the future
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 when they can already read these online free of charge. That point of view is plausible, but only to a certain degree. On the one hand, digital
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 or newspapers prove to be superior to their traditional counterparts in two ways. First of all, reading online is more convenient. Indeed,
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 can read anywhere without the burden of carrying
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books
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, as long as they carry with them a digital device with Internet access, which is far more portable than printed works.
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, when travelling, many
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 prefer to read as a relaxation, but they fear that
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 might take up all the luggage.
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 thanks to the advent of smart devices like computers or smartphones.
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if each book is considered to open up a novel imaginary world, a smartphone,
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 of worlds as
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 for readers to dive in. In fact,
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 are increasingly published or sold in a digital format that can be downloaded from plentiful sites and stored online, providing users with boundless access.
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, physical
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 seem to be more
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plenty of occasions
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 as reading aloud to children or sharing with others as
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 are more connected gathering around a concrete work in person.
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, for groups of
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 do not obtain
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adequate computer literacy like the elderly or
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 can not afford a device or Internet access, conventional printed works are
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prefered
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preferred
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,
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 can
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 serve as a kind of
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. Many families still install bookshelves filled with works, either modern or classical, of various genres. Even if they have not read any of them,
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 and the hidden content behind each cover still develop a sense of
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intellectuality
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 around the home. To reiterate,
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 reading digitally may be the norm of
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future societies, it can not eliminate the sales of
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 and newspapers from
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’s life.
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, printed media may be regarded as of various other purposes and values
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source of information.
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introduction conclusion present
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Good use of transitional phrases helps in maintaining a smooth flow between ideas.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • accessibility
  • convenience
  • cost-effective
  • cultural value
  • sentimental value
  • reliability
  • distracting
  • access to
  • digital devices
  • internet
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