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In the age of digital communication and social media, face-to-face interactions are becoming less common. Some people think that this is decreasing people’s ability to communicate well in person. Do you agree or disagree with this view?

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In
this
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 era, Digital
communication
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 and social
media
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 are becoming more and more common, making face-to-face interactions less common.
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 some
people
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,
this
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 is decreasing
people
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's ability to communicate well in person and I agree with
this
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 idea. In the present
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 digital
communication
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 and social
media
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 are developing more and more day by day which is attracting more
people
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 towards its
use
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.The algorithms used in social
media
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 apps do not allow their users to get rid of
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 easily
as a result
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,
people
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 stop communicating with each other in the real world which makes their
communication
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skills
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 less effective.
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,One of the studies shows that communities who
use
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 social
media
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 more, do not meet with their families very often and when they are in any physical meeting 90% of the time they are unable to convey their ideas to other
people
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due to
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 weak
communication
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skills
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.So, we can say that the
use
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 of social
media
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 and digital
communication
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 weakens a person's
communication
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skills
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 in person.
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, there are
people
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 who say that If we
use
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 social
media
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 very often we will stop meeting each other in real life. It will affect our feelings which are in every single family and eventually our relations with our family and relatives will be affected.
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,I have been using Facebook for the past 2 years and
then
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 I stopped using it a few months ago because I found out that I
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 not
meeting
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 my family
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last
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 2 years and the reason is Facebook
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 whenever I meet my family in the
last
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 2 years I did not feel any kind of emotion with my family members.So,I stopped using social
media
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 because it was clearly disturbing my family life. In conclusion,After the above discussion, I agree with the view that social
media
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 affects our
communication
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skills
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 and
also
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 decreases face-to-face interactions.

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task achievement
The essay has a clear position but it needs to be expanded. You could include more arguments or examples to further explain your view.
coherence cohesion
Ensure each paragraph focuses on a single idea. For example, the second paragraph could focus on social media algorithms, while the third discusses emotional impacts separately.
coherence cohesion
The essay could be better structured. Include clear topic sentences at the start of each paragraph, and ensure that there is a logical flow between points and paragraphs.
task achievement
The essay clearly states your opinion on the topic, which is great for task achievement.
task achievement
You provided an example from your personal experience, which makes the essay more relatable and demonstrates an understanding of the topic.
coherence cohesion
The conclusion effectively summarizes your main points and restates your position.
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