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The chart shows global emissions of greenhouse gases in 2016. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and making comparisons where relevant. You must You should spend around 20 minutes on this task.

The chart shows global emissions of greenhouse gases in 2016. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and making comparisons where relevant. You must You should spend around 20 minutes on this task.
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The pie chart depicts the greenhouse gas
emissions
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 sector ( 2016).
Moreover
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,
this
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 illustrates that there were 49.4
billion
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tonnes
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 of CO2 equivalent produced globally.
Overall
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, there are seven various items, namely "energy production", "buildings", "industry", "transportation", "landfills and water waste", "chemical and cement", and "agriculture, forestry and land use".
Furthermore
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, the energy used by industry accounted for the highest percentage.
In contrast
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, landfills and water waste comprised the lowest proportion.
To begin
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 with, only industrial
emissions
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 surpassed 20%, accounting for 24% (24.2
billion
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tonnes
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).
Subsequently
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, the
emissions
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 of buildings and transit showed a similar rate, which made up 18% (17.5
billion
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tonnes
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) and 17%, respectively. Looking at the
emissions
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 of agriculture, forestry and land use in detail,
this
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 item constituted 19 per cent (19.3
billion
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tonnes
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 of carbon dioxide). As for "chemicals and cement" and "landfills and water waste", both did not exceed 5%, representing 5% (5.2
billion
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tonnes
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) and 3% (3.2
billion
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tonnes
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), respectively.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words emissions, billion, tonnes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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