Some people think that it’s a good to socialise with work colleagues during evenings and weekends. Other people think it’s important to keep working life completely separate from social life. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.
Some say that it is crucial to keep working life from social life,
while
others say that it is great to communicate with people from work
from time to time. It can be the beginning of irresponsibility at work
, but on the other side, I think it is important to meet in the evenings with colleagues.
On the one hand, meeting a lot of colleagues out of work
can lead to diminished responsibility. It is important to have respect for workers
in your field of professionalism. For example
, my father
is a lover of evening parties
with colleagues and every three days they have such
a meeting. After some months, he said to my mother that his workers
did not have any respect for him and every time late or did not do the work
.
On the other hand
, it can be good for workers
to have such
a meeting sometimes. This
meeting parties
out of work
can give workers
enjoyment and can eradicate depression and stress from work
. For instance
, after that situation, my father
started to do weekend parties
only if the workers
did their job nicely and if they reached any goals in work
. So after that, my father
's work
started his new brightness and every person who works for my father
shows respect for him.
In conclusion, it can be bad for work
people to have a lot of parties
out of work
because of starting to have irresponsibility to work
, but I believe that it also
can give a lot of pluses such
as going down stresses from the work
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