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Some people think that it’s a good to socialise with work colleagues during evenings and weekends. Other people think it’s important to keep working life completely separate from social life. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

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Some say that it is crucial to keep working life from social life,
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 others say that it is great to communicate with people from
work
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 from time to time. It can be the beginning of irresponsibility at
work
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, but on the other side, I think it is important to meet in the evenings with colleagues. On the one hand, meeting a lot of colleagues out of
work
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 can lead to diminished responsibility. It is important to have respect for
workers
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 in your field of professionalism.
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, my
father
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 is a lover of evening
parties
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 with colleagues and every three days they have
such
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 a meeting. After some months, he said to my mother that his
workers
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 did not have any respect for him and every time late or did not do the
work
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.
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, it can be good for
workers
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 to have
such
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 a meeting sometimes.
This
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 meeting
parties
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 out of
work
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 can give
workers
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 enjoyment and can eradicate depression and stress from
work
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.
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, after that situation, my
father
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 started to do weekend
parties
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 only if the
workers
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 did their job nicely and if they reached any goals in
work
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. So after that, my
father
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's
work
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 started his new brightness and every person who works for my
father
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 shows respect for him. In conclusion, it can be bad for
work
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 people to have a lot of
parties
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 out of
work
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 because of starting to have irresponsibility to
work
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, but I believe that it
also
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 can give a lot of pluses
such
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 as going down stresses from the
work
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • bonding experience
  • team cohesion
  • workplace dynamics
  • informal setting
  • job satisfaction
  • professional boundaries
  • work-life balance
  • morale
  • professional reputation
  • networking
  • interpersonal relationships
  • boundary maintenance
  • overlapping roles
  • personal and professional life
  • conflict resolution
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