The graph below shows the number of books read by men and women at Burnaby Public Library from 2011 to 2014. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of books read by men and women at Burnaby Public Library from 2011 to 2014. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line chart compares the amount of
books
read by males and
females
at Burnaby Public Library over a period of 3 years.
Overall
,
it is clear that
the average
sum
of
books
read by
men
increased dramatically throughout the given period, and reached its peak
at the end
.
Whereas
, the amount of women who read
books
fluctuated.
To begin
, in 2011, the total
sum
of
read
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reading
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books
by
men
was around just 3000,
whereas
females
read approximately more than 2000
books
.
Moreover
, we can notice that the
sum
of read
books
by both
men
and
females
increased respectively from about 3000 to 4000 and from roughly 5000 to just above 8000, from 2011 to 2012.
In addition
, it is noticeable that the
amount
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number
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of articles read by
females
rose steadily by 2000 in 2013, reaching its peak,
while
there was a significant increase in the total number of readings by the opposite gender from just 4000 to 10000 at the same time;
however
, after the
sum
of
books
read by women part declined moderately to around 7000 in 2014, and
men
saw a dramatic rise to 14000, getting its peak.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words books, females, sum, men with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "dramatically" was used 2 times.
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