The graph below shows the percentage of households with diferent kinds of technology in the U.S. from 1995 to 1999.

The graph below shows the percentage of households with diferent kinds of technology in the U.S. from 1995 to 1999.
The line graph compares the fraction of houses using five different
techonologies
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technologies
in the United States of America over the 4 year period.
Overall
,
it is clear that
washing machines were by far
most
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the most
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used type of
cutting edge
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cutting-edge
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technology.
By
contrast
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contrast,
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the percentage of cell phone subscribers rose dramatically over the given period. in 1995, the number of households containing
internet
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Internet
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barely reached 10%. At a time when one in five citizens of
america
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America
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had a phone. Computers and DVD players were used in 40% and 25% of U.S.
citizens
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citizen's
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households respectively. 1996 saw a rise in terms of usage
techonologies
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technologies
, with the exception of DVD players which received 10% fewer users than in the previous years. Over the following 3 years, computers were rising at a constant rate of nearly 7% a year reaching
enormous
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70% by 1999.
However
, PCs got overshadowed by mobile
phone
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phones
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, which were jumping
in
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a
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exponential rate, reaching its peak of 75%. Both DVDs and
internet
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the internet
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grew
in
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at
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a similar rate until 1998 when connection received a 20% boost.
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