Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems.

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Some would argue that
climate
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become one of the main
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to
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life on Earth.
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essay agrees with the accuracy of
this
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statement because
greenhouse
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effect produced by cars and factories is
main
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concern
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air pollution that leads to
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humanity
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dilemma
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with
oceans
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that
polluted
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by rubbish.
Greenhouse
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effect is produced by cars and factories, which numbers are growing through the years.
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effect mainly
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from carbon dioxide that
have
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been collected in
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for decades. Gases that
stuck
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in the atmosphere
starts
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to mirror sunlight
form
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from
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sun
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after a
while
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when
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made
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a layer that can double
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whole amount of light
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from it.
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, in 1967 scientists from all parts of
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found
increase
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in
climate
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for
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a
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3 Celsius degrees,
whereas
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today in more industrial
society
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societies
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scientist
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scientists
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faced
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with
5
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because of
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more
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amount of toxic carbon dioxide produced.
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humankind
face
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problem
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problems
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with
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that
becoming
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polluted by trash that
come
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from
rivers
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. The reason for
that is
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a low level of hygiene in nearby towns placed alongside
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rivers
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that
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to
oceans
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. Because of that
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starts
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to collect rubbish that
after
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kills thousands of
fish like
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creatures mainly by trash that contains plastic and toxic liquids.
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, Harvard University says there are only
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1% of all
rivers
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actually pollute
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and it can be easily fixed by providing needed
aids
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to countries where they
placed
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. India's Brattham
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can be
good
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example
for
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one of the polluter
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because it
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nearby
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town and contains 70%
of
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bacteria. In conclusion,
climate
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is a main concern for all humanity to deal with,
however
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, we
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need to remember about ocean pollution that
destroy
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ecosystem
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the ecosystem
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of all water creatures to prevent future problems with them
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The essay presents a clear position on the topic and attempts to support it with relevant points and examples.
coherence cohesion
The introduction and conclusion are present and serve their purpose of introducing and summarizing the main points effectively.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • biodiversity
  • extinction
  • habitat loss
  • ecosystem
  • food chain
  • imbalance
  • interconnected
  • climate change
  • pollution
  • personal actions
  • policy changes
  • education
  • awareness
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