The pie charts below show the devices people in the 18 to 25 age group use to watch television in Canada in two different years.

The pie charts below show the devices people in the 18 to 25 age group use to watch television in Canada in two different years.
The provided pie charts indicate how many juveniles
in ages
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18 to 25
year
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years
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old
use
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to watch
TV
in Canada in two
various
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years. A glance at the graph reveals that the highest percentage of watching
TV
was for Conventional
TV
in 2009.
However
,youngsters did not prefer to watch Conventional
TV
in 2019. In 2009,precisely %34 of
people
tended to watch Conventional
TV
in Canada (which was the highest percentage of consuming
TV
over the period),just ahead of the number of watching Flat-screen
TV
at %27 in 2019.
Moreover
,just under a quarter of
people
who were between 18 to 25 years old
prefered
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preferred
to use a Laptop at %20 in 2009,compared to the number of young
people
in ages
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18 to 25 years old at %12 in 2019.
In contrast
,only a tiny fraction of
people
were into
watch
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Conventional
TV
at %4 in 2019.(Which was the least number of using television over the whole year).
In addition
,using mobile phones for watching
TV
in 2009 was significantly less popular than watching
TV
with
cellphones
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cell phones
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in 2019 at %15 and %26,respectively.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • pie charts
  • 18 to 25 age group
  • devices
  • watch television
  • Canada
  • comparison
  • shift
  • preferences
  • mobile devices
  • traditional televisions
  • technological advancements
  • television viewing habits
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