Many people believe that women make better parents than men and that is why they have a greater role in raising children in most societies. Others claim that men are just as good as women at parenting. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

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mothers

have a more significant role in nurturing their

children

or

fathers

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that fathers

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also

can play similar roles. From my perspective,

although

both parents should contribute to training offspring, females lead kids’ upbringing. First of all, nobody can ignore the traditional role of women in the development of

children

. Indeed,

mothers

have more attachments to their kids.

In other words

, they carry

children

in their bellies and nurture them in their bodies,

then

they spend a lot of time

to milk

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them after their birth. They are committed to

teach

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teaching

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their kids regarding values of life and

support

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them to define and achieve their targets. Even gender imbalance of responsibility in raising

children

is obvious in most of the animals.

Although

there are some exceptions in

this

regard, most females take care of the offspring.

Furthermore

, women are more focused on their parental duties, since in most

of

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human communities men have more responsibilities in society .

Therefore

, fathers cannot spend enough quality time with their

children

. Needless to mention, even employed women

also

have enough concentration on their jobs as

mothers

. Because they have multi-task characteristics which enable them to provide equal

attentions

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to

their

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both activities .

For instance

, my mother was a nurse who could nurture six

children

. She assisted them to be successful and beneficial individuals for the society. I can remember my father’s busy schedule did not allow him to contribute to the kids’ upbringing. In a nutshell,

mothers

have more contribution to

children

's training , since they are more familiar with their requirements and they are

also

more versatile and responsible than fathers.