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The table below gives information about population in Australia and Malaysia in 1980 and 2002. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

The table below gives information about population in Australia and Malaysia in 1980 and 2002. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.
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the presented table illustrates the
population
 of two different countries,
th
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the
Australia
 and
Malaysia
 in 1980 and 2002. It is clearly seen that both nations had a significant increase in their
population
 during more than 2 decades with 4.9 and 10.6
millions
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million
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 growth for
Australia
 and
malaysia
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Malaysia
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, respectively. as can be
seen
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seen,
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 the contribution of
male
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males
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 and
female
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females
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 in
Australia
 remained the same
with
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at
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 49.9 and 51.1,
while
 the proportion of
male
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males
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was
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increased (50.3% to 50.6%) and
according to
 that the percentage of
female
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females
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was
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decreased (49.7% to 49.4%). people who are over 65 years old contributed 9.6% and 12.4% (with 2.8% growth) in
Australia
 in 1980 and 2002 respectively ;
however
,
Malaysia
 had a minimal
rose
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 in over 65
population
 (0.6%) in the same period. the average annual
population
 growth increased
0.1
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by 0.1
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% in
Australia
.
in
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 contrast, in
malaysia
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Malaysia
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the
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a
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 0.3 decline was shown.
Although
 the birth rate increased in
Australia
, decreased in
Malaysia
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words population, australia, malaysia with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 4 times.
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