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some people believe that Some people think that children should start school at a very early age, but others believe that they should not go to school until they are older. Discuss both these views anf give your opinion

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 prefer to not go to
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society. On the one
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children
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children
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. On the other hand , despite the above arguments other people choose to believe that they should not go to
school
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Try to elaborate on your points with more specific examples and details. This will help to make your argument more convincing and comprehensive.
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Work on improving the logical flow between sentences and paragraphs to enhance overall readability and coherence.
overall advice
Pay attention to sentence structure, grammar, and word choice to make your writing clearer and more polished.
task achievement
You make a good attempt at addressing both sides of the argument, which is essential for task achievement.
coherence cohesion
Providing an introduction and conclusion helps to frame your essay well.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cognitive development
  • social interactions
  • educational foundation
  • structured learning
  • emotional and psychological readiness
  • effective learning
  • cost-effective
  • childcare centers
  • explore their interests
  • creativity
  • love of learning
  • parental burden
  • economic considerations
  • childhood freedom
  • natural learning
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