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A rise in childhood obesity is a real threat to health with an increasing number of children now classified as overweight. What are the causes of the problem and what measures can be taken to solve them? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge of experience.

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There is no doubt that these days childhood
health
becomes
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 a very
interested
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 topic in many countries.
However
,childhood obesity
considered
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 one of the most controversial
issue
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issues
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 today.In
this
essay
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 I am going to explain the causes and effects of
this
 phenomenon and I will give some solutions to avoid
from
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increasing
this
 problem.
To begin
 , there are many reasons that
contributes
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 to
spread
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the spread
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of this
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this
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these
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 issues.First of all , unhealthy food habits
such
 as
consumption
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the consumption
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 of junk food like chips and sweets which contain a lot of sugar and oil
along with
 calories
that
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can increase the weight of youngsters and can create various
health
 issues namely cancer and heart problems.
Moreover
, spending too much
time
 on social media can
also
 be a reason
of
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 obesity as these days,
children
 invest their leisure
time
 on various platforms: watching television, scrolling reels and playing indoor games that can be harmful
for
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 their
health
 as they do not prefer to do exercise or outdoor activities which can make them healthy
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.
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On the other hand
 , there are
a
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several solutions that can alleviate
this
 habit . First of
all
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 parents should
make
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take
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 control
for
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of
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 the
time
of
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their
children
spending
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spend
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 watching television and playing games.
However
, they give
the
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limited
time
for instance
 at
leat
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least
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 two
hourse
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hours
 each day.
Moreover
, parents have to monitor their
adolescent
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adolescents
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abot
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about
 the kind
if
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of
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 food they eat .
As a
result
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result,
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 they should give their
children
 some advice about the harmful results of staying
long
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a long
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time
 watching television and
advice
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advise
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 them to
practice
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exercise and
doing
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do
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 sports.
To conclude
,
chidrens’
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children’
health
 is important,
however
 , every individual should be monitoring their
children
 as
the
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their
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health
consider
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is considered
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 the best investment in
lives
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their lives
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.
Additionally
, obesity has a negative influence
in
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on
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kids
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kids'
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futures
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future
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 lives.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Childhood obesity
  • Overweight
  • Sedentary lifestyle
  • Nutritional education
  • Physical activity
  • Screen time
  • Fast food consumption
  • Sugar-rich beverages
  • Dietary choices
  • Urbanization
  • Genetic factors
  • Predispose
  • Environmental factors
  • Health threat
  • Lifestyle choices
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