You have recently applied for a course at the college and have been accepted. However , you cannot join the course due to some reasons. Write a letter to the principal of the college. In your letter, •which course you have applied for •why you cannot join the course •ask about the possibility of the course in the future

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Dear Sir or Madam A week ago I applied for a

course

which is English at the college and

have

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been accepted so I am writing to ask you

organise

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other

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another course

other courses

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course

again.

Last

month I saw a post about

course

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a course

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which is organized among students on

noticeboard

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the noticeboard

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at college. Actually, I want to learn

foreign

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a foreign

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language and I'm interested

English

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in English

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more. I'm going to learn

this

language

for

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before

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leaves

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leave

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USA

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the USA

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This

is because I want to talk to

with

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apply

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foreigners and

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apply

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learn

their

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about their

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cultures during travel. That's why I applied for

English

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an English

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course

and you accepted it. Truly, I had to join the

course

but I couldn't join it

due to

I have some reasons. Before I

attend

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course

I went to the beach with my fellow students and we swam at the beach which is very cold water.

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The next

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day I had a sore throat and

some

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headache. I went to the doctor and he prescribed medicine. After

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apply

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I took a tablet, I had

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apply

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pain again. My mood is

get

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getting

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down for can not join the

course

. Now I'm asking you

that

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organised

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organise

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another

course

letter and if you organise a

course

I will satisfied

for

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with

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this

. I look forward to hearing from you. Yours faithfully. Richard.

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Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
1
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
23
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

8 paragraphs

212 words

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