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You have recently applied for a course at the college and have been accepted. However , you cannot join the course due to some reasons. Write a letter to the principal of the college. In your letter, •which course you have applied for •why you cannot join the course •ask about the possibility of the course in the future

#course #college #•which #•why #•ask #possibility #future
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Dear Sir or Madam A week ago I applied for a
course
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 which is English at the college and
have
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 been accepted so I am writing to ask you
organise
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to organise
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other
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another course
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course
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 again.
Last
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 month I saw a post about
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course
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a course
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 which is organized among students on
noticeboard
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the noticeboard
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 at college. Actually, I want to learn
foreign
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a foreign
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 language and I'm interested
English
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in English
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 more. I'm going to learn
this
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 language
for
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before
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leaves
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leave
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USA
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the USA
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.
This
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 is because I want to talk to
with
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apply
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foreigners and
to
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apply
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learn
their
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about their
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 cultures during travel. That's why I applied for
English
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an English
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course
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 and you accepted it. Truly, I had to join the
course
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 but I couldn't join it
due to
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 I have some reasons. Before I
attend
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attended
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to
course
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 I went to the beach with my fellow students and we swam at the beach which is very cold water.
Next
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The next
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 day I had a sore throat and
some
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a
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 headache. I went to the doctor and he prescribed medicine. After
,
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apply
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 I took a tablet, I had
a
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apply
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pain again. My mood is
get
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getting
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 down for can not join the
course
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. Now I'm asking you
that
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to
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organised
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organise
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 another
course
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 letter and if you organise a
course
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 I will satisfied
for
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with
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this
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. I look forward to hearing from you. Yours faithfully. Richard.
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task achievement
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task achievement
You addressed all parts of the task and provided relevant details.
suitable writing tone
The tone of the letter is polite and appropriate.
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