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The following bar chart shows the different modes of transport used to travel to and from work in on European city in 1960, 1980 and 2000.

The following bar chart shows the different modes of transport used to travel to and from work in on European city in 1960, 1980 and 2000.
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The bar chart compares the four different types of
transportation
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 used to move around the city in an unknown city over a period of 60 years.
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,
it is clear that
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 usage of cars to travel around the city was enormously increasing, reaching its peak.
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, walking had the opposite situation, falling from the most used one to the almost lowest one. In 1960, just under 25% of the European people preferred
non environmentally
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 friendly
transportation
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, in which 17% of individuals chose public transport and the rest on private
transportation
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. Over the next 40 years, individuals preferred fast machines over any other way to move.
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, cycling and foot walking
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 by far the most popular types of travelling in the past, reaching an overwhelming 60% per cent combined. The choice of the European people changed with the urbanisation of the cities.
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, lost interest in iron bikes, reaching only 5% of interest by 2000,
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the
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gas based
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transportation
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 was at its peak.
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, people prefer comfortably sitting in buses rather than being on foot all day, making footwalks the second most unpopular way to travel.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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