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The chart below shows the number of households in the US by their salary ’ income in 2007, 2011 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the number of households in the US by their salary ’ income in 2007, 2011 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart illustrates the rates of annual salaries in five different categories in United States households in 2007, 2011 and 2015. The unit given is
millions
.
Overall
, by annual wage, most of the
people
 in the US had
the
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salaries of 100,000
dollars
 or more in comparison to the range of 75,000 to 99,999
dollars
 which stood at the
least
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lowest
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 number over the recorded period. Looking at the range of 75,000
dollars
 to 100,000
dollars
 or more, in those three mentioned
time
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, both have the opposite trend where accounted for 14
millions
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million
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people
 had a slight decline to 13
millions
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million
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 before reaching
to
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15
millions
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million
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of
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people
 from income between 75,000 to 99,999
dollars
 where held at the lowest digit out of five classifications.
In contrast
, annually
payment
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payments
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 from 1000,000 or more had a higher number throughout the time, from 29
millions
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million
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then
 increase to 33
millions
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million
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 households. Regarding pay rates from 50,000
dollars
 or less, more than 20
millions
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million
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of
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apply
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people
were
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received
such
 payments over the three periods.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words millions, people, dollars with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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