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The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a paritcular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a paritcular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given diagram provides useful information on the
amount
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number
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 of people that have travelled to a Caribbean
island
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 and divides them into two groups based on their
choise
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choice
 of lodging, during the 7-year
time
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period
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.
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, there is an ongoing upward trend in the total number of visits
eaxh
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each
 year, with the majority staying on the
island
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 in comparison to a
cruise
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 ship. Looking
firstly
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 at the
numbers
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number
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 of tourists staying on a
cruise
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 ship, a slight decline was observed between 2011 and 2012,
however
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, numbers
continue
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continued
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 to rise throughout the rest of the disclosed
time
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period
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 reaching a maximum of 2 million stays in 2017.
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, staying on the
island
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 has been the
preffered
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preferred
 option, until the year 2015, when a slight decrease in comparison to
cruise
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 ships can be seen, dropping from 1.5 million to 1.2.
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, when looking at the number of total visitors during the given
time
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period
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, a continuous upward trend can be observed, reaching a maximum of 3.5 million in 2017. In conclusion, the
preffered
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preferred
 way of lodging has for the majority of the
time
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period
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 been staying on the
island
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, with
cruise
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 ship stays surpassing the amount in the later years, with the
additon
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addition
, of the number of visitors that continues to rise each year.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words island, time, period, cruise with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "comparison" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stays" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • upward trend
  • steady increase
  • peak
  • stabilization
  • notable change
  • market saturation
  • seasonal variations
  • tourism infrastructure
  • external factors
  • global economic conditions
  • persistent popularity
  • demand patterns
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