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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. Below is a map of the city of Brandfield. City planners have decided to build a new shopping mall for the area, and two sites, S1 and S2 have been proposed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. Below is a map of the city of Brandfield. City planners have decided to build a new shopping mall for the area, and two sites, S1 and S2 have been proposed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The map shows the information
on
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before and after the development of Brandfield. The city organizers have decided to build a new shopping mall for the
are
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area
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, and two sites, S1 and S2 have been proposed.
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,
Gold
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the Gold
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course
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Course
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 and
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the park
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park
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 took
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large space
in
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 the map,
while
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the industrial
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industrial
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 Estate was the smallest place. The green fields to the north-west of the city were Golf course and park. The S1 site of the map had
City
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a City
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center
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 and a small part of
Housing
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a Housing
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 Estate, Which
located
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 to the
south-east
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southeast
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 of Brandfield. In the middle of the road
had
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river
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a river
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 road and
railway
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a railway
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.
Hovewer
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However
, there
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plenty of
place
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places
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 to build
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a shoppingmall
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shoppingmall
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shopping malls
 to the
noerth-east
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northeast
 of S1. The S2 had only an industrial Estate, Which took
small
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spce
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space
 of the Branfield and
located
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 to the south-east. in the middle of the S2
had
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railway
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a railway
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, which gave opportunities to move goods from one to another.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • city planners
  • proposed
  • shopping mall
  • the main features
  • comparisons
  • advantages
  • disadvantages
  • recommendation
  • site selection
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