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The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a paritcular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a paritcular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph gives information about the distribution of tourists rate which
visits
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 a Caribean Island over a
period
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 of seven years from 2010 to 2017.
Overall
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, it can be clearly seen that the figures for
visitors
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 staying on cruise ships ,
visitors
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 staying on the island and the total showed an upward trend. Notably,
at the end
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 of the
period
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, the total number of
visitors
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 soared
while
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visitors
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 staying on cruise ships became the highest number. At the beginning of the
period
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,
visitors
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 staying on cruise ships stood at around 0.25
million
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visitors
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 and had a slight fluctuation to 0.5
million
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visitors
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 in 2013. From
this
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 point onwards, the number of these
visitors
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 increased significantly by 1,5
million
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 of
visitors
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 in 2017.
In contrast
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,
visitors
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 staying on the island started at exactly 0,75
million
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visitors
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 and remained stable in the following year.
Thereafter
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, it experienced a slight growth to 1.5
million
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visitors
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 in 2013 and it remained unchanged until 2015 before declining to about 1.25
million
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visitors
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.
At the end
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 of the
period
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,
this
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 went up to 1.5
million
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visitors
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.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "at the end".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words period, visitors, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • upward trend
  • steady increase
  • peak
  • stabilization
  • notable change
  • market saturation
  • seasonal variations
  • tourism infrastructure
  • external factors
  • global economic conditions
  • persistent popularity
  • demand patterns
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