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You have recently moved to a new neighborhood. You want to recommend a local restaurant to a friend who will be visiting you soon. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: Describe the restaurant and its location. Explain why you recommend the restaurant. Suggest a time when you could go there together.

#neighborhood #restaurant #friend #location #time
Dear Amir, Hi . I hope
this
 letter finds you well.As you know I just moved to Gisha
last
 week and now we are living in
same
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 neighborhood.I really miss you and want to invite you for a meal in a restaurant which I just discovered in our
neighborhood
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. The place is Shadiz , a
treditional
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traditional
iranian
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Iranian
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resturant
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restaurant
 that provides almost all kinds of
iranian
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 food .
This
 can bring us all our childhood memories together . The location is 2 streets down from my place on 23th
streest
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streets
street
 of Gisha .
In addition
of
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variety
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 of choices , Another main point of Shandiz is affordable prices .
Also
 , The staff are polite and patient and they will explain to us any question about the menu . The restaurant is clean and safe.At
last
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 there are many parking plots around
this
 place . I want to
offer
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 you to set the visit
on
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for
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 next
monday
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Monday
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, at 8 PM so we both have finished our work and there will be enough time to get ready . Take care, Pouria
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coherence and cohesion
Review the letter for minor grammatical errors and punctuation issues to improve clarity and readability.
language and tone
Try to use more varied and precise vocabulary to enhance the quality of your writing.
task response
You have provided clear and specific details about the restaurant, its location, and reasons for your recommendation.
language and tone
The letter has a friendly and inviting tone, which is appropriate for the purpose.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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