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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The charts below give information about the way in which water was used in different countries in 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The charts below give information about the way in which water was used in different countries in 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
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The
pipe
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pie
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 chart shows the percentage of
world
water
 usage in three sectors which are
agriculture
, domestic and industry. The graph chart indicates
water
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the water
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 portion used
those
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in those
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 sectors in four countries.
In
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overall
, we can see that the most
world
water
 resource was serving
for
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apply
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agriculture
 in
year
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the year
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 2000.
And at
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At
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 the same that year, in New Zealand, the weighing of
water
 usage had a
diffrent
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different
trending
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 that the
water
 for domestic was
dominented
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dominant
.
According to
pipe
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the pipe
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 chart, the domestic was using the least of
world
water
 with 8%.
Whereas
,
the
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apply
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most of the
world
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world's
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water
 was
using
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used
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 for
agriculture
 at 70%, and the rest 22% was for
industry
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the industry
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. Looking at
graph
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the graph
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 bar, we can
know
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see
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 that Canada
use
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uses
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 the most
of
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apply
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water
 for industrial 80%, and the least
of
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apply
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water
 for
agriculture
 at 8%.
Meanwhile
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 it was quite
oppersite
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opposite
with
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to
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 India, it is 92%, 5% and 3% respectively for
agriculture
, domestic and industry.
Also
, we can be aware of the tremendous of
water
 for
agriculture
was
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used in China.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words world, water, agriculture with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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