You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The charts below give information about the way in which water used in different countries in 2000. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The charts below give information about the way in which water used in different countries in 2000. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words
The pie chart shows the percentage of world
water
usage in three sectors, which are
agriculture
, domestic and industry. Meanwhile, the graph chart indicates the
water
portion used in those sectors in four countries.
Overall
, we can see that the worldwide
water
was serving
a
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cultivation the most in
year
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the year
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2000.
In addition
,
at
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the same
that
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year, in New Zealand, the weighing of
water
usage had a different trend that the
water
for domestic was dominant. With reference to the pie chart, the domestic was using the least of international
water
resources with 8%.
Whereas
, most of the world's
water
used
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for crop growing with 70% and the rest 22% was for
the
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industry. By looking at the graph bar, we can see that Canada uses the most
water
for industrial 80% and the least
water
for
agriculture
at 8%. Meanwhile, it was quite opposite to India, it is at 92%, 5% and 3% respectively for
agriculture
, domestic and industry.
In addition
, we can be aware of the tremendous of
water
for
agriculture
used in China.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "in addition".
Vocabulary: Replace the words water, agriculture with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.

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