Some people think paying taxes is a big enough contribution to their society, while others think people have more responsibilities as members of society than only paying taxes. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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People
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have different views about their social responsibilities. Some of them think that paying
taxes
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does all their social
duties
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,
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some of them believe their responsibilities in
society
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are more than one payment, as I think
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, the predominant factor that results in
people
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thinking paying
taxes
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is enough for their social
duties
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is that they think
governments
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are just responsible for social problems. It means that they only pay
taxes
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, and
governments
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should decide how to budget their incomes to manage
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society
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and supply social requirements.
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, they believe that their limited knowledge about different social issues does not allow them to contribute to social issues, so policies should be implemented by
governments
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to handle these social issues.
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, they believe that the main
responsible
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of homeless
people
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is the
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governments
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government
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and
their
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its
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policies.
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,
people
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just pay
taxes
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to provide financial
source
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resources
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, and it is the government`s responsibility to handle their problems. The other group of individuals has a different view of
citizen
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definition. From their perspective,
people
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have heavy
duties
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in
society
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. They should collaborate with
governments
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to manage
the
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society
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by obeying the rules and paying attention to their social
behavior
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. Meanwhile, paying
taxes
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is just a financial part of their social
duties
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and they have
variety
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a variety
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responsibilities
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of responsibilities
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as
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citizen
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a citizen
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, greenery services supply new plants in different places in the cities to enhance the quality of air and decline pollution, so after that, it is their
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citizen
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responsibility to keep them far from harmful
behavior
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behaviour
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such
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as picking t flowers or leaving trash. In conclusion,
although
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paying
taxes
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is an important part of
citizen
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duties
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, in my opinion, individuals have many
duties
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in
society
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to help
governments
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encounter social problems and tackle them.
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You've provided a clear discussion of both views and articulated your own stance effectively.
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Your introduction and conclusion adequately frame your essay, providing a clear start and end.
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