The chart below gives information about global population percentage and distribution of wealth by region

The chart below gives information about global population percentage and distribution of wealth by region
The
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data
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shows a brief description of
global
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the global
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population
percentage and distribution of
wealth
by region.
Overall
, it can be seen that
China
has the most
population
share
while
North
America
contributed the most
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the
wealth
share
.
China
contributed most of the
population
share
. Among the eight regions,
China
’s
population
share
is about more than 20%, followed by other
Asia-Pacific
countries, India, Europe and Africa with more than 10% of
population
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the population
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share
.
On the other hand
, regions with less than 10% of
population
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the population
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share
includes
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Latin
America
and
Caribbean
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the Caribbean
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, North
America
and Rich
Asia-Pacific
respectively.
However
, in terms of
wealth
share
, North
America
presented the highest with nearly 35%. It is
then
followed by Europe with 30%,
Rich
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and Rich
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Asia-Pacific
with almost 25% respectively. The rest have almost 5% of the
wealth
share
namely Latin
America
and Caribbean, other
Asia-Pacific
,
China
, Africa and India. In conclusion,
China
has the most
population
share
but has the lowest
wealth
share
.
On the other hand
, North
America
contributed the highest
wealth
share
but one of the lowest
population
share
.
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  • global population percentage
  • distribution of wealth
  • region
  • discrepancy
  • notable patterns
  • breakdown
  • share of global wealth
  • economic policies
  • historical factors
  • resource distribution
  • global economics
  • social stability
  • policy making
  • interventions
  • imbalances
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