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You recently took part in a training course. The organizer of the course has asked you for some feedback. Give details of the course you took part in. Say what you found useful on the course. Suggest ways the course could be improved.

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Dear Sir I am writing to provide feedback on the recent training
course
 I attended. The
course
 was focused on project management, and it lasted for two weeks. The sessions covered various topics
such
 as planning, risk management, and team leadership. In my point of view, I found the
course
 very helpful. The instructors were knowledgeable and explained the concepts clearly. The practical exercises were particularly useful as they allowed me to apply what I learned in real-world scenarios. The group discussions
also
 helped me understand different perspectives and solutions.
However
, I think the
course
 could be improved in a few areas.
Firstly
, it would be great if you
include
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 more case studies, as they give a better understanding of how to deal with real challenges.
Secondly
, I suggest adding more time for the question-and-answer sessions.
This
 would allow participants to clarify their doubts in more detail.
Overall
, the
course
 was informative and well-organized. Thank you for providing
this
 valuable learning experience. Your's sincerely, Frunze Andrei
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task achievement
You could provide more specific examples to support your points – for example, mention a specific practical exercise that was particularly beneficial.
coherence cohesion
Ensure clarity and continuity between paragraphs to further enhance the flow of ideas. For instance, using transitional phrases can help connect different parts of your feedback.
language
Watch out for minor grammatical issues, like the incorrect use of 'your's' which should be 'yours'.
task achievement
The essay is clear, well-structured, and sticks to the task requirements, providing relevant details and suggestions.
coherence cohesion
The introduction and conclusion are clear and effectively frame the contents of the essay.
organization
You did a good job of providing constructive feedback with logical suggestions for improvements.

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