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The chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billioin) of telephone calls in the UK, divided into three catagories, from 1995-2002. Summarises the information by selection and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billioin) of telephone calls in the UK, divided into three catagories, from 1995-2002. Summarises the information by selection and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart illustrates data on
total
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the total
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 figure of
minutes
 of telephone calls in
UK
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the UK
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 based on three
differrent
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different
 classifications from 1995 to 2002. The unit given is in
billion
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billions
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.
Overall
, mobiles all calls had a
significantly
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significant
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 surge over the recorded period ,
whereas
 local fixed line started at a higher
point
then
 had a drop
in
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at
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 the end of the mentioned time. Looking at the upward trends, mobiles all calls stood at 2
billion
minutes
, which was the lowest compared to
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the others
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others
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other
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 two in the initial year.
However
, in the following year, it had a slight rise to 5
billion
minutes
, at which
point
its
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it
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 reached
to
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apply
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a peak
point
, accounting for 45
billion
minutes
 in 2002. National and international fixed calls fell a close
second,
it had a steady rise over seven years with 60
billion
minutes
 in 2002. Regarding local fixed calls, it stood at 72
billion
minutes
 in 1995
then
 reached a peak
point
 at 90
billion
minutes
 in 1998 before havering for two years. In 2000, it experienced a decline from 90 to 72
billion
minutes
.
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