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The follawing bar charts shows the different modes transport used to travel to and from work in one Europian city in 1960 , 1980 and 2000

The follawing bar charts shows the different modes transport used to travel to and from work in one Europian city in 1960 , 1980 and 2000
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The charts illustrate the four various types of transport that
used
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were used
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 to and from
work place
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the workplace
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 in one particular European city in 1960, 1980 and 2000.
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, in 1960 people preferred to use
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bus
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buses
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 or bikes and even
by
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on
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 foot. In 1980,
situation
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the situation
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 changed and humans mostly took
car
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cars
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,
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bus
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buses
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 or
bike
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bikes
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. In 2000, car mode was the primary way to go to work.
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, personal
automobile
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automobiles
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was
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 unpopular in 1960 only 5% of total travellers used them. The leading position
got
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travels
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travellers
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which
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who
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 preferred to go without any machines,
it
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 means that almost 35%
humans
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of humans
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 preferred
this
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 way. In 1980,
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bus
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the bus
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 was
most
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a most
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 likely way to travel, nearly 25% respectively.
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Then
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The
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car
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cars
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 and bikes got from 15% to 25%
total
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in total
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.
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, in 2000 more than a third of European citizens used personal cars to travel.
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, approximately 15 per cent of travellers took
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bus
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the bus
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 and only a small minority of passengers used bikes type.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words bus with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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