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The maps below show the Happy Valley Shopping Center in 1982 and 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps below show the Happy Valley Shopping Center in 1982 and 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The provided map indicates the different changes
of
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 a huge
happy valley
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Happy Valley Mall
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mall
beween
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between
 1982 and 2012. A glance at the map reveals that the whole
area
 experienced various construction and development over the period. In 1982,there used to be a lake in the northwest of the shopping
mall
.
However
,the lake was demolished and replaced by Furniture Retail in 2012.Another striking change is the erection of the Parking Lot in the southwest of the shopping
center
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centre
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in
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from 1982 to 2012.
Moreover
,
Coffe
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the Coffe
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 shop and Food
store
 were
renoved
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renovated
removed
 and converted to
Sports
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a Sports
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store
 and
Electronic
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an Electronic
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store
 in the north of the
mall
,respectively. It is interesting to note that the Entertainment
area
,Elevator and Toilets remained unchanged between 1982 and 2012.
In addition
,another notable development is the transformation of
Furniture
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the Furniture
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store
 into
Food
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a Food
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sotre
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store
 in the southeast of the shopping
center
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 from 1982 to 2012.Surprisingly,
Lobby
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the Lobby
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area
 was demolished and turned into
Entrance
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the Entrance
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 in 2012.
Also
,the government introduced the Themed Restaurant near the Entertainment
area
 in the east of the
mall
 in 2012.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words mall, area, store with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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