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Some people believe that to become successful in sports one should have a natural talent. Others think that perseverance and practice are a crucial part to success. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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one must have some
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great training is only a
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 might have a great advantage over in case of
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finishing training is required for them. But it is not that easy for those who
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coherence cohesion
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Work on developing your ideas more fully. Include specific examples or case studies to support your points, making your arguments more compelling.
general
Review grammar and spelling carefully. Errors in these areas can distract the reader and make your arguments less persuasive.
introduction conclusion
Ensure that your introduction clearly states both sides of the argument and that your conclusion effectively summarizes your main points while providing your own opinion.
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You presented a balanced view, considering both sides of the argument.
introduction conclusion
The essay has a clear introduction and conclusion, making your stance on the issue evident.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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