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Academic The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparision where relevant.

Academic The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparision where relevant.
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The provided line graph illustrates the average monthly fluctuation in the values of Copper,
Nickel
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 and
Zinc
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 over 12 months from January to December of 2014.
Overall
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, it can be seen that despite some fluctuations, the proportion of volatility in prices of
Nickel
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,
Zinc
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 and Copper decreased, increased and remained relatively unchanged respectively over the period given. Meanwhile,
Nickel
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 and
Zinc
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 patterns demonstrate partial similarities.
Firstly
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, the change in the cost of
Nickel
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 started the period at 6% and
then
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 witnessed a downward trend hitting a low of -3% in
June
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 before rebounding to -1% from July to September.
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, the figure recorded a sharp rise and reached 1% in November and stayed steady till the end.
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, the percentage of volatility in the value of
Zinc
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 stood at 1% in January and
then
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 rose to 3% in February before facing four declines in a row by hitting -1% in
June
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.
Moreover
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, the figure remained between -1% and 0 from
June
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 to October when it touched -1% again before climbing significantly to 2% in the
last
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 month.
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, the proportion fluctuation in the cost of Copper began at 2% in the first month before witnessing four consecutive falls to hit about -0.5% in May and remained stable until
June
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.
Furthermore
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, the figure
then
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 faced a marked rise to 1% in July and stayed unchanged till September before fluctuating first downward and
then
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 upward reaching around 1.5% in December.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words nickel, zinc, june with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "downward" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stayed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "unchanged" was used 2 times.
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