It is generally believed that some people are born with certain talents, for instance for sport or music, and others are not. However, it is sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sports person or musician. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

A considerable amount of
people
think that some
people
are born with
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talents
while
,
on the other hand
, some
people
claims
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claim
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that any
children
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child
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can become a
musician
or
sports person
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sportsperson
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by teaching.
According to
me, if
children
are
teached
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taught
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in the right way they surely become better than the
people
born with talents. On the one hand, the main reason is that
people
born with
sport
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sports
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or music
talent
someday become arrogant
beacuse
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because
of their talents. They feel proud of being talented
that
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and that
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they do not need to do any work on their
skills
.
For example
, one of my
friend
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friends
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was born with
sports
skill
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skills
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. He was very proud that he
is
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was
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different in
skills
from everyone else.
Therefore
, he did not do any work on his skill. He became arrogant
of
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his
skills
and
in
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as
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result
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, he failed badly.
On the other hand
, some
people
claims
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claim
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that
children
without
talent
can be taught to become
a
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apply
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good
sports person
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sportspeople
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or
musician
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musicians
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.
This
is because they know that they are not born with
talent
therefore
, they have to do
hardwork
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hard work
. They are
teached
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taught
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to work on their
skills
and
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apply
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be
consistend
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consistent
and do a lot of
hardwork
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hard work
. They are
teached
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taught
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to
be remain
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remain
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down to earth.
For instance
, my brother was very fond of music. He was taught
in
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apply
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the right way to become a good
musician
. In conclusion,
although
talent
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talented
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born
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apply
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people
are better than the ones that are without
talent
however
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, however
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,
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apply
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if
children
are taught in the right way they will become good
sports person
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sportspersons
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or
musician
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musicians
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.
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grammar
Work on the use of articles and improve subject-verb agreement to avoid grammatical errors. Edit sentences like "some people claims" to "some people claim".
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task response
The essay effectively addresses both views and provides a personal opinion.
coherence cohesion
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Innate talent
  • Nurture
  • Prodigy
  • Proficiency
  • Deliberate practice
  • Physiological factors
  • Grit
  • Perseverance
  • Cultural norms
  • Structured training
  • Physical predisposition
  • Natural aptitude
  • Dedicated training
  • Societal influence
  • Passion
  • Genetic endowment
  • Skill acquisition
  • Expertise
  • Extracurricular activities
  • Mastery
  • Cognitive abilities
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