It is generally believed that some people are born with certain talents, for instance for sport or music, and others are not. However, it is sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sports person or musician. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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A considerable amount of
people
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think that some
people
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are born with
God gifted
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God-gifted

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talents
while
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,
on the other hand
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, some
people
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claims
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claim

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that any
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children
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child

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can become a
musician
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or
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sports person
Correct your spelling
sportsperson

The word sports person seems to be miswritten. Consider replacing it.

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by teaching.
According to
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me, if
children
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are
teached
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taught

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in the right way they surely become better than the
people
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born with talents. On the one hand, the main reason is that
people
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born with
sport
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sports

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or music
talent
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someday become arrogant
beacuse
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because

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of their talents. They feel proud of being talented
that
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and that

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they do not need to do any work on their
skills
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.
For example
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, one of my
friend
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friends

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was born with
sports
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skill
Fix the agreement mistake
skills

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. He was very proud that he
is
Wrong verb form
was

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different in
skills
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from everyone else.
Therefore
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, he did not do any work on his skill. He became arrogant
of
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in

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his
skills
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and
in
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as

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result
Correct article usage
a result

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, he failed badly.
On the other hand
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, some
people
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claims
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claim

The verb claims does not seem to agree with the subject. Consider changing the verb form.

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that
children
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without
talent
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can be taught to become
a
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apply

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good
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sports person
Correct your spelling
sportspeople

The word sports person doesn’t seem to fit this context. Consider replacing it with a different one.

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or
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musician
Fix the agreement mistake
musicians

It seems that musician may not agree in number with other words in this phrase.

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.
This
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is because they know that they are not born with
talent
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therefore
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, they have to do
hardwork
Correct your spelling
hard work

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. They are
teached
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taught

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to work on their
skills
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and
Correct word choice
apply

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be
consistend
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consistent

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and do a lot of
hardwork
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hard work

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. They are
teached
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taught

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to
be remain
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remain

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down to earth.
For instance
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, my brother was very fond of music. He was taught
in
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apply

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the right way to become a good
musician
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. In conclusion,
although
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talent
Replace the word
talented

The word talent doesn’t seem to fit this context. Consider replacing it with a different one.

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born
Verb problem
apply

There may be a verb use issue here.

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people
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are better than the ones that are without
talent
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Linking Words
however
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, however

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,
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apply

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if
children
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are taught in the right way they will become good
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sports person
Correct your spelling
sportspersons

The word sports person doesn’t seem to fit this context. Consider replacing it with a different one.

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or
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musician
Fix the agreement mistake
musicians

It seems that musician may not agree in number with other words in this phrase.

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grammar
Work on the use of articles and improve subject-verb agreement to avoid grammatical errors. Edit sentences like "some people claims" to "some people claim".
example
Provide more elaborate and specific examples to strengthen your arguments. This will help in making your essay more convincing and well-supported.
vocabulary
Expand your vocabulary by using a wider range of synonyms and expressions. This will help in making your essay more engaging and less repetitive.
task response
The essay effectively addresses both views and provides a personal opinion.
coherence cohesion
The structure of the essay is logical, with a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion.
support
The writer uses some relevant examples, such as personal stories, to illustrate the points made.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Innate talent
  • Nurture
  • Prodigy
  • Proficiency
  • Deliberate practice
  • Physiological factors
  • Grit
  • Perseverance
  • Cultural norms
  • Structured training
  • Physical predisposition
  • Natural aptitude
  • Dedicated training
  • Societal influence
  • Passion
  • Genetic endowment
  • Skill acquisition
  • Expertise
  • Extracurricular activities
  • Mastery
  • Cognitive abilities
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