The graph shows visitor numbers to 5 attractions in the city of Parkvale from 1996 to 2016
The graph demonstrates the
number
of Use synonyms
visitors
to five of the main attractions found in Parkvale between 1996 Use synonyms
to
2016.
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and
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had
been an increase in the Wrong verb form
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number
of Use synonyms
visitors
to the National Gallery and the Indigenous Art Centre over the Use synonyms
twenty year
period. Add a hyphen
twenty-year
Conversely
, Linking Words
visitors
to the Aquarium Use synonyms
the
State Zoo have dropped significantly by 2016, Change preposition
of the
while
the Museum attracted the same Linking Words
number
of Use synonyms
visitors
over the given period.
In 1996, the National Gallery had about 300,000 Use synonyms
visitors
. Use synonyms
This
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number
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has
nearly Wrong verb form
had
trippled
by 2004 before it dropped slightly to 800,000 Correct your spelling
tripled
visitors
in 2008. Use synonyms
However
, the Linking Words
number
of Use synonyms
visitors
continued to rise over the next 8 years to reach its peak of about 900,000 in 2016. Use synonyms
Similarly
, Linking Words
Visitors
to the Use synonyms
Indiginous
Art Centre rose from nearly zero in 1996 to reach a peak of approximately 400,000 in 2004 after which the Correct your spelling
Indigenous
number
decreased over the following 12 years. Aquarium Use synonyms
visitors
have witnessed a Use synonyms
signifivant
drop from approximately 500,000 Correct your spelling
significant
visitor
in 1996 to less than 100,000 Change to a plural noun
visitors
visitor
twenty years later. Change to a plural noun
visitors
Similarly
, State Zoo Linking Words
visitors
dropped from 300,000 to less than 200,000 in 2016. Museum Use synonyms
visitors
, Use synonyms
on the other hand
, remained stable over the twenty-year period, accounting for just over 400,000 visits.Linking Words
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