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Band 1

Some People claims that not enough of the waste from homes is recycled. They say that the only way to increase recycling is for governments to make it a legal requirement. To what extent do you think law are needed to make people recycle more of their waste?

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Introduction
Today we
wonts
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want
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 to talk about recycled. in my
opinion
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opinion,
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recycle
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recycling
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 is very important.
Body paragraph 1
In our
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society
socitey
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socitey,
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 we have many
problem
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problems
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 with recyled.
for
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example
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example,
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 in
street
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the street
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 or
shopping
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shopping,
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 we
dont
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don't
 have enough
sapce
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space
 or suit
sapce
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space
for divided
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to divide
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 them.
Body paragraph 2
I
beleive
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believe
 if
i
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I
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 had
good
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a good
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 education
about
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in
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 that subject we
noweday we dont
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wouldn't
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 have any problem.
Body paragraph 3
Recyle
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Recycle
 is very
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important
imporatnt
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important
 because it can future
explotion
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exploration
explosion
 and harmful
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environment
enviroment
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environment
Body paragraph 4
I read some
article
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articles
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 about
recycle
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recycling
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,
according to
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study
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studies
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 in
modern
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a modern
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country
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countries
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 with education or
campain
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campaigns
 or
enviromental advertisment
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environmental advertisements
also
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 bought new technology and machine
solve
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to solve
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 that problem.
Body paragraph 5
If you
dont
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don't
 attention to
recycle
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recycling
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, one day when you
want
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won't
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go
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to go
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 out of
home
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your home
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 you see
many
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much
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waste
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wastes
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 in
street
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the street
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 or across your home.but with
comperate
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cooperate
 we can do many
thing
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things
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.
Conclusion
I am
fan
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a fan
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recycle
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of recycling,
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 and
i
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I
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 start it
of
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in
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 my home with
seprate
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separate
 wet waste with other waste.

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Start with a clearer thesis statement. Your opinion is clear but could be stated more effectively.
coherence cohesion
Ensure you have a well-defined structure: Introduction, Body Paragraphs, Conclusion.
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Provide more specific examples and data to support your points.
coherence cohesion
Use more linking words and phrases to improve the flow between sentences and paragraphs.
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Improve spelling and grammar. Consider using tools or having someone proofread your work.
coherence cohesion
Summarize your points effectively in a conclusion. This makes your argument more impactful.
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Your enthusiasm for recycling is evident and persuasive.
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Mentioning personal actions towards recycling adds authenticity to your essay.
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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • mandate
  • compliance
  • penalties
  • incentives
  • tax reductions
  • rebates
  • educational campaigns
  • awareness
  • community programs
  • local initiatives
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