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The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the carts show how it was distributed.

The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the carts show how it was distributed.
#information #police #budget #area #britain #money #carts #show
The
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 illustrate that
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 give information on the police budget during
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2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table provides where the money came from and the carts show how it was distributed
Overall
it is clear that
 the table
show
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the
increases
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 rate during to 2018
while
 ,the pie chart
provide
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 information about how the money was spent it is rose salaries ( officers and staff ) According that what can be shown
it
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is police budget from 2018 increased
national
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the national
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gonverment
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government
 by
percentage
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a percentage
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177.8
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of 177.8
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 .
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 the local taxes increased dramatically become
average
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102.3
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of 102.3
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 percent.
Moreover
 the other sources
no
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do not
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 change the rate it is 38 .
Furthermore
it
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is
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in
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 the period
2018
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in 2018
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 increased average the total became 318.6
percent
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per cent
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.
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 the pie illustrates information about
who
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how
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 the money was
a
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spent it is
disparity
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a disparity
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 figure . The technology increased significantly becoming 14
percent
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per cent
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 on the other hand, buildings and transport
it
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is no change
while
 salaries ( officers and staff )
decreases
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decreased
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 figure during to two years
is
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in
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 very large numbers .
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 78%.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "illustrate" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "provides" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increases" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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