Many people argue that in order to improve educational quality, high school students are encouraged to make comments or even critisism on their teachers. Others think it will lead to loss of respect and discipline in the classroom. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

It is argued that improving educational standards has become mandatory in
this
contemporary era and pupils are encouraged to give information regarding teaching
methods
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they are taught in classes by tutors,
whereas
, some people are opposite of
this
notion. I believe teaching
methods
should be rectified if required in order to
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educational quality and I will discuss both sides of the essay in the upcoming paragraphs.
To begin
with, folks who opine
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feedback
not only becomes
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of interruption in discipline but
also
loss of respect are considering that certain
students
may utilize
this
opportunity to target teachers personally rather than offering constructive criticism.
For example
, if a
student
is not studying well in
the
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class and
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punished
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a
teacher
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this
for his/her bright future
then
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might provide
feedback
negatively to get revenge from the
teacher
,
therefore
,
although
this
technique can increase class standards with the help of
students
feedback
, sometimes it can have
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impact on
teacher
image and class discipline. On the other side, it is always thought that why does teaching
feedback
seem mandatory?
This
is because encouraging
students
to provide
feedback
can help identify teaching
methods
that are ineffective, leading to adjustments that enhance learning.
For example
, some teaching government jobs are obtained by giving money and people do not have appropriate skills in order to teach schoolers.
Also
, tutors
have
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lack
of
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teaching
methods
and they do not know how to teach today's youth,
that is
the reason
students
should be asked to make comments to get high quality in
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system.
This
method will bring
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education system for
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generation. In conclusion,
although
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feedback
might
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good
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teacher
's reputation
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some
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revenge, we can not neglect
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sides of
this
initiative which will bring more valuable study techniques in coming years
due to
current
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comments on teaching
methods
.
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A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • educational quality
  • constructive criticism
  • effective teaching methods
  • engagement
  • investment in education
  • classroom management
  • respect
  • discipline
  • toxic environment
  • anonymous feedback mechanisms
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