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SOME PEOPLE SAY THAT ART (EX. PAINTING, MUSIC, POETRY, ETC.) CAN BE MADE BY EVERYONE WHEREAS OTHERS BELIEVE THAT IT CAN ONLY BE MADE BY THOSE WITH SPECIAL ABILITY. DISCUSS BOTH VIEWS AND GIVE YOUR OPINION.

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Introduction
These days ,
people
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art
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art
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easy
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 others believe
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This
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 essay will discuss both sides and will draw my personal conclusion.
Body · 1
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art
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maket
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makes
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hight
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wave
 or youtube or some think like that.
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after that will be
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famous
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easy
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, and not all guys we can
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make
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who want
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all
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 or three
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music we should ask some experienced
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instance , there are many
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given courses
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and
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Conclusion
In conclusion , after analysis of both
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there is nothing not
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task achievement
Work on grammar and sentence structure to improve clarity and readability. Consider using varied sentence structures and avoid repetition.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph stays focused on a single main idea and develops it clearly. Use topic sentences and supporting details to improve coherence.
coherence cohesion
Use linking words and phrases to better connect ideas between sentences and paragraphs (e.g., 'Furthermore,' 'Moreover,' 'On the contrary').
task achievement
Develop and elaborate on examples to ensure they support your argument effectively.
task achievement
The essay addresses both views and attempts to provide a personal conclusion, which shows an understanding of the task requirements.
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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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