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Your friend had made a plan for you to see a movie together but you cannot now not join him. You've found another friend who can go instead of you. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: Explain why you cannot go anymore Say who can go instead of you Say why this person is a good person to go with

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Hello, Akash I hope you are doing good.I was so
exited
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 to meet you because we will meet after almost 1 year. But I am sorry to write that I am unable to come
for
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movie
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the movie
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. I know we made
this
 plan
before
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one month
so
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, we can plan
accordingly
 our work and study.But as you know, I am
manager
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a manager
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 at Tim Hortons, I have to go for
meeting
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a meeting
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 on that same day. It is
very
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 important meeting for me.
Thus
, I can not cancel that meeting. But, As you
are
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 asking about Arpita
from
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 6 months. How is she doing and all
.
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 So, I made a plan. I already ask Arpita for a movie and dinner. She wants to join you for that. I gave her the address and your number. She will see you there.I hope you will forgive me. I am really sorry for that, but promise I will come definitely
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this
 weekend to see you. Enjoy
movie
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a movie
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 and dinner Best regards Your
besty
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best
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grammar
Ensure proper punctuation and grammar usage. 'I was so exited to meet you' should be 'I was so excited to meet you.'
tone
Maintain a consistent writing tone throughout the letter. The tone in some parts comes across as too informal for the context.
task response
You've covered all required points in the task—explaining why you cannot go, who can go instead, and why this person is a good choice.
coherence cohesion
You included a greeting and a closing, which adds a nice touch and makes the letter more formal and complete.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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