The map below is of the town of Garlsdon. A new supermarket (S) is planned for the town. The map shows two possible sites for the supermarket.
The illustrated map diagram depicts the planned
mapped
for a new Replace the word
map
supermarket
in the town
called Garlsdon
which has a population of 65000.
Overall
, th
map describes the ideal position for the Correct your spelling
the
supermarket
within the
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apply
Garlsdon
town
surrounded by housing, industries and transportation routes which connects
the Change the verb form
connect
town
internally and with other towns.
Upon closer examination, it is observed that the supermarket
is in city town
is ideal to facilitate everyone. Primarly
, Correct your spelling
Primarily
the
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apply
Garlsdon
town
lies in between two big towns, Hindon with a populaiton
of 10,000 with a closing Correct your spelling
population
distance
of 12km and Cransdon with 29,000
population at Correct article usage
a 29,000
25
km Correct article usage
a 25
distance
which is connected via railway and road routes making city town
location ideal for people. Secondly
, another town
Bransdon in southeast
is at a Add an article
the southeast
distance
of 16km with 15,000 population connecting garlsdon
through road routes creating opportunities for higher sales. Apart from people who are travelling from Change the capitalization
Garlsdon
far
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a far
the far
distance
, this
supermarket
is ideal for Garlsdon
people as well making it accessible for everyone as it near
the housing and surrounded by Add a missing verb
is near
industrial
area.Add an article
an industrial
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