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The map below is of the town of Garlsdon. A new supermarket (S) is planned for the town. The map shows two possible sites for the supermarket.

The map below is of the town of Garlsdon. A new supermarket (S) is planned for the town. The map shows two possible sites for the supermarket.
The illustrated map diagram depicts the planned
mapped
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 for a new
supermarket
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 in the
town
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 called
Garlsdon
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 which has a population of 65000.
Overall
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,
th
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the
 map describes the ideal position for the
supermarket
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 within
the
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Garlsdon
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town
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 surrounded by housing, industries and transportation routes which
connects
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 the
town
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 internally and with other towns. Upon closer examination, it is observed that the
supermarket
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 is in city
town
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 is ideal to facilitate everyone.
Primarly
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,
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Garlsdon
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town
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 lies in between two big towns, Hindon with a
populaiton
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population
 of 10,000 with a closing
distance
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 of 12km and Cransdon with
29,000
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 population at
25
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a 25
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km
distance
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 which is connected via railway and road routes making city
town
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 location ideal for people.
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, another
town
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 Bransdon in
southeast
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 is at a
distance
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 of 16km with 15,000 population connecting
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garlsdon
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Garlsdon
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 through road routes creating opportunities for higher sales. Apart from people who are travelling from
far
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a far
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distance
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,
this
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supermarket
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 is ideal for
Garlsdon
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 people as well making it accessible for everyone as it
near
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 the housing and surrounded by
industrial
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an industrial
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 area.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words supermarket, town, garlsdon, distance with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Accessibility
  • Congestion
  • Economic benefits
  • Environmental impact
  • Foot traffic
  • Green space
  • Job creation
  • Local property values
  • Parking availability
  • Pollution
  • Proximity
  • Public transportation
  • Sustainability
  • Traffic patterns
  • Residential areas
  • Shopping convenience
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