the graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

the graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
The line graph illustrates how many participants joined 5 activities at one social
center
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in Melbourne, Australia from 2000 to 2020.
Overall
, for most of the period given Film Club had the most attractive,
while
musical performances had the least. Table tennis and musical performances increased from the middle of the period given,
while
, for film club and martial arts, these remained stable. The only activity that declined was amateur dramatics. With regards to the number of participants who were active in table tennis, it began with 15
people
in 2000 and remained stable until 2010, before it reached a peak at above 50
people
in the
last
year.
Likewise
, no one was attracted to musical performance in 2005, before it increased over to 10 persons in 2010 and
then
peaked at below 20 in 2020.
On the other hand
, table tennis declined significantly to 5
people
at the end
of the year after a start at around 30
people
in 2000.
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to the film club, it remained stable at approximately 60
people
and martial arts at around 30 respectively from the beginning until the end of the year.
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