Society is based on rules and laws. If individuals were free to do whatever they want to do, it could not function. To what extent do you agree or disagree with the above statement? (22/08)

While
it is widely debated
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society
should be based on
rules
and laws-based or not in order to create peaceful communities, others argue that
such
rules
can
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restricted
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or
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our
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and autonomy in some ways. The reasons why I support
this
statement towards
regulations-driven
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society
is essential will be elaborated on in
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essay.
To begin
with, it may seem sensible for some to believe that a universal agreement among the members and consequences of particular
actions
is crucial for
the
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society
.
This
is possibly because the more
people
it
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the greater attitudes it will be which can
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to conflicts later on. Take
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,
for example
; a
groups
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of
people
from different
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tend to have unique thoughts about something and if they all do things freely without any
rules
stated conflicts among
people
can
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. From my point of view, though some
people
migh
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this
idea as they
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it as a violation
toward
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one's autonomy to do something freely.
Hence
, I strongly agree with
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society
as it
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with
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logical and written agreement toward some
actions
as well as
including solid
actions
on how to
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with certain cases for those who break the
rules
. Murdering and
slaughthering
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slaughtering
,
for instance
, it is obvious that
this
is an
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for one's taken
others
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people
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live
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which can be implemented as they violate the
right
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for
living
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of
the
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others and punishment
toward
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such
inhumane
actions
should be regulated for dealing with these incidents like life-long imprisonment or sentenced to death will make
people
in the community to fear and limit
this
actions
. In summary,
although
it is undeniable that
rules
sometime
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violate one's autonomy to do something freely, I am of the opinion that a
society
controlled
with
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legal commands can prevent conflicts and tragedy from those who violate
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • social order
  • harmonious
  • individual freedoms
  • societal norms
  • unrestricted freedom
  • crime rates
  • dysfunctional
  • fair distribution
  • human rights
  • justice system
  • accountability
  • enforcing laws
  • restrictive regulations
  • societal functionality
  • legal frameworks
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