Society is based on rules and laws. If individuals were free to do whatever they want to do, it could not function. To what extent do you agree or disagree with the above statement? (22/08)
While
it is widely debated about
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whether
society
should be based on rules
and laws-based or not in order to create peaceful communities, others argue that such
rules
can some how
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somehow
restricted
or Wrong verb form
restrict
limits
our Correct subject-verb agreement
limit
right
and autonomy in some ways. The reasons why I support Fix the agreement mistake
rights
this
statement towards regulations-driven
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a regulations-driven
society
is essential will be elaborated on in this
essay.
To begin
with, it may seem sensible for some to believe that a universal agreement among the members and consequences of particular actions
is crucial for the
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apply
society
. This
is possibly because the more people
it have
the greater attitudes it will be which can Change the verb form
has
contributing
to conflicts later on. Take Change the verb form
contribute
be contributing
group-work
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group work
for example
; a groups
of Fix the agreement mistake
group
people
from different background
tend to have unique thoughts about something and if they all do things freely without any Fix the agreement mistake
backgrounds
rules
stated conflicts among people
can be happened
.
From my point of view, though some Change to the active voice
happen
people
migh
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might
opposed
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oppose
this
idea as they viewed
it as a violation Wrong verb form
view
toward
one's autonomy to do something freely. Change preposition
of
Hence
, I strongly agree with legal-controlled
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a legal-controlled
society
as it provided
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provides
with
logical and written agreement toward some Change preposition
apply
actions
as well as
including solid actions
on how to dealt
with certain cases for those who break the Change the form of the verb
deal
rules
. Murdering and slaughthering
, Correct your spelling
slaughtering
for instance
, it is obvious that this
is an example
for one's taken Fix the agreement mistake
examples
others
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other
people
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people's
live
which can be implemented as they violate the Replace the word
lives
right
for Fix the agreement mistake
rights
living
of Add an article
the living
a living
the
others and punishment Correct article usage
apply
toward
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for
such
inhumane actions
should be regulated for dealing with these incidents like life-long imprisonment or sentenced to death will make people
in the community to fear and limit this
actions
.
In summary, although
it is undeniable that rules
sometime
violate one's autonomy to do something freely, I am of the opinion that a Replace the word
sometimes
society
controlled with
legal commands can prevent conflicts and tragedy from those who violate Change preposition
by
it
.Correct pronoun usage
them
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