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Should university education be free for all students, or not?

#university #education #students
Our topic today is "Should
university
education
 be free for all students, or not?"
Firstly
, it would be good if the government gave students a chance. Poor but intelligent students should be able to use
this
 chance. I mean,
people
 may be
pauper
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 but somebodies of them deserve
better
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a better
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education
. In conclusion, it isn'
t
 their choice, you know.
Besides
it
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, they actually need it.
Because
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, if they can'
t
admission
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 to the
university
 after finishing high school, in the future
all
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of
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that
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people
 can'
t
 find
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a job
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job
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 for themselves. It means
,
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 they may live unhappily in the dest of their life.
In addition
, if we
should
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think
the
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 worst situation, these
people
 may get depressed
for
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 being unemployed. We have to tell the
truths
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. These situations always happen and they are reasons why
university
education
 should be free.
Also
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 young
people
's support is
big
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a big
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 thing for every country.
For instance
, after
graduation
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graduation,
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 they can create their own business. It may be commerce, agriculture, tourism and so on. But uneducated
people
 probably can'
t
 do that. After all, if you ask my answer, yes, I think
university
education
 should be free. In conclusion, to make
people
 happy is
good
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think
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, isn'
t
 it?
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clear comprehensive ideas
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introduction conclusion present
While you have a conclusion, it would be beneficial to summarize your main points more clearly to reinforce your argument.
complete response
The essay has a clear stance on the subject, making it easy to understand your position.
introduction conclusion present
You have a good introduction and conclusion, which frame your argument well.
logical structure
Your arguments are logical and follow a coherent structure.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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