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The bar chart shows the distribution of YouTube users worldwide as of January 2023 by age group. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart shows the distribution of YouTube users worldwide as of January 2023 by age group. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar graph illustrates the distribution of various
age
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group
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groups
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people
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 on the basis of gender who used YouTube globally as of January 2023.
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,
it is clear that
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 the 25-34
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group
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 was the most active users, both males and females but men
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 higher in number
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women
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. All the
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 groups show boy users dominating girls except 65+ and the numbers were equal among 55-64 years old. As per the graph, the highest male
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 accounted
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 12.2% belonging to the
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group
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 of 25-34 and the
women
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 were roughly 3% lower in rate. In fact, the number of boys
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 higher as compared to the
women
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's quantity and was above 6% in all the divisions except in the two
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 groups.
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 , 4.6%
each
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 male and
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female in
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the 55
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-64 years
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 and
women
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 outweighed men by apparently 0.6% in 65+ people. Not only in the 25-34
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 but
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 in 18-24, 35-44 and 45-54,males interested in using the app,made approximately 9%, 9.6% and 6.7% respectively with minimal differences between them.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words age, group, women with synonyms.
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