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The bar chart shows the distribution of YouTube users worldwide as of January 2023 by age group. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words. You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The bar chart shows the distribution of YouTube users worldwide as of January 2023 by age group. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words. You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.
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The bar graph illustrates the distribution of various
age
group
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groups
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people
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of people
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 on the basis of gender who used YouTube globally as of January 2023.
Overall
,
it is clear that
 the 25-34
age
group
 was the most active users, both males and females but men
being
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were
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 higher in number
to
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than
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women
. All the
age
 groups show boy users dominating girls except 65+ and the numbers were equal among 55-64 years old. As per the graph, the highest male
user
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users
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 accounted
about
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 12.2% belonging to the
age
group
 of 25-34 and the
women
 were roughly 3% lower in rate. In fact, the number of boys
were
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 higher as compared to the
women
's quantity and was above 6% in all the divisions except in the two
age
 groups.
That is
 , 4.6%
each
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of each
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 male and
each
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female in
55
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the 55
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-64 years
group
 and
women
 outweighed men by apparently 0.6% in 65+ people. Not only in the 25-34
group
 but
also
 in 18-24, 35-44 and 45-54,males interested in using the app,made approximately 9%, 9.6% and 6.7% respectively with minimal differences between them.
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