IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 7.5

The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed.

The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed.
✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
The table depicts data on the sources of the
police
Use synonyms
budget
Use synonyms
,
while
Linking Words
 the pie chart compares the allocation of the
police
Use synonyms
budget
Use synonyms
 across different categories in the
years
Use synonyms
 2017 and 2018.
Overall
Linking Words
, the national government
provide
Wrong verb form
provided
show examples
 the biggest portion of the
police
Use synonyms
budget
Use synonyms
 in both
years
Use synonyms
,
while
Linking Words
 the majority of expenditures were allocated to salaries for officers and staff. In 2017, the total
police
Use synonyms
budget
Use synonyms
 was notably increased by 2018. The national government contributed the largest share, approximately 175
million
Use synonyms
pounds
Use synonyms
, with a slight rise in 2018.
In addition
Linking Words
, in 2017, local taxation was the second largest source, starting at around 91
million
Use synonyms
pounds
Use synonyms
 and increasing to over 100
million
Use synonyms
pounds
Use synonyms
 by 2018.
Finally
Linking Words
, other sources like grants, remained stable, making up close to 38
million
Use synonyms
pounds
Use synonyms
 in both
years
Use synonyms
. As for the allocation of funds, salaries for officers and staff represented the largest expenditures at 75% in 2017, though
this
Linking Words
 figure dropped by around 6% in 2018. Despite the decrease, it remained the primary expense. The smallest cost was on technology, accounting for only 8% in 2017, but it saw an increase to 14% in 2018. The proportion of the
budget
Use synonyms
 allocated to buildings and transport remained constant at 17% over the two
years
Use synonyms
.

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site's author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
▼
Vocabulary: Replace the words police, budget, years, million, pounds with synonyms.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 3 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
▼
What to do next:
Look at other essays: