Monekybox will lead to panademic like what covid19

Nowadays, Monkeypox has a mortality rate that varies from 0.1 to 10%, and many people are wondering if it will lead to a pandemic like
COVID-
19 or not
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Despite people's fear of the
Mpox
disease, it will not lead to a
panademic
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pandemic
as it has a different way of transmission (Maria Cheng,2024).
Although
there are some similarities between both
viruses
, but still, the differences are noticeable in the method of transmission, their nucleic
acid
and their
symptoms
. In
this
essay, I will discuss each point for both
viruses
.
Firstly
, folks should be careful in dealing with people who are infected with
Mpox
or
COVID-
19. These
viruses
could be transmitted to you through surfaces that have been
contamintated
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contaminated
by an infected person followed by touching your mouth, nose or eyes.
Furthermore
, cleaning our clothes
regulary
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regularly
is important as they could be a
cause
of infection.
Howerever
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However
unlike
COVID-
19,
Mpox
mainly could be
spreaded
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trough
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through
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a
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direct long contact with the patients like talking and touching
with
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them, but not through the air as
it
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is the case in
COVID-
19.
Secondly
,
Mpox
and
COVID-
19 are
zoonatic
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zoonotic
diseases and they are formed by
viruses
that
are contain
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a
necleic
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nucleic
acid
inside them.
Zoonatic
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Zoonotic
means when the virus
was
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originally
affecting
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an animal, but after
that
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it has
transmitted
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to humans. On the one hand, the virus that
cause
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Mpox
is composed of
necleic
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nucleic
acid
which is double strands
DNA
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,
make
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it less dangerous from
COVID-
19 as it is less
likly
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likely
to mutate.
On the other hand
, SARS-CO-2 which
cause
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causes
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COVID-
19 has
a
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RNA
necleic
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nucleic
acid
, and
it
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its
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possibility to mutate and for more dangerous types of
COVID-
19 is higher as professor Rodney Rohde
said
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"RNA
viruses
mutate very effectively ­– they're diabolical, in my opinion, they're just really nasty
viruses
" .
Thirdly
, both
disease
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are sharing
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some
symptoms
, but that does not mean that they are similar. They can lead to fever, headache and back pain which
are considers
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a
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commos
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common
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symptoms
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for many
virul
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viral
duseases
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diseases
. Opposed to
COVID-
19, rush on the skin is not an uncommon
symptoms
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for
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Mpox
, rush is the main
sympom
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symptom
for
Mpox
and it may
last
for about 2 to 4 weeks.
As a result
, it will affect the person's
apperance
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appearance
which considers
as
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a
pysicoloical
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physiological
symptom. Even though the
Mpox
disease is feared by many, it is unlikely to
cause
a pandemic as
COVID-
19 did in 2019.
While
there are some similarities between the two
viruses
, significant differences exist in their transmission method, nucleic
acid
, and
symptoms
.
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