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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The graph below shows average carbon dioxide (CO2) emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy, and Portugal between 1967 and 2007. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The graph below shows average carbon dioxide (CO2) emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy, and Portugal between 1967 and 2007. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph given provides
inforamtion
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information
 about the number of CO2
releases
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released
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from
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by
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 people in the United Kingdom,
Sweden
, Italy, and Portugal between 1967 and 2007.
Overall
,the percentage of Carbon dioxide in
UK
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the UK
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 and
Sweden
 dramatically
fall
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fell
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 over the period of time,
while
 the popularity of CO2 in Italy and Portugal rose. Taking a closer look at the line graphs, we can see that in 1967, the rate of CO2 personal emissions in Italy and Portugal
begen
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grew
 by nearly 2% and 4,2 per cent.
Moreover
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 the amount of
this
 carbon output in
Sweden
 and
United
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the United
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 Kingdom was
alomst
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almost
 8.2% and 10.4%.
Batween
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Between
 1967 and 1987, CO2 in Italy
increasrd
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increased
 roughly twice,
whereas
 the number
of
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in
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Sweden
 declined twice
6
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by 6
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%. In 1987, Italy and
Sweden
become
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became
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 equal in the ratio of around 7%.
Than
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Then
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 the two
countaries
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countries
 which are Portugal and Italy
grow
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grew
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 approximately 5% and below 8% in 2007.
On the other hand
,
United
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the United
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 Kingdom and
Sweden
 showed a fall
of
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in
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 CO2, which
exercised
Verb problem
increased
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 by 5% and more than 8%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words co, sweden with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 2 times.
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