You recently bought a toy from a company online. When the toy was delivered, you found some problems with it. Write a letter to the company manager. In your letter: -Describe the toy -Explain the problems with it -Tell the manager what you would like her/him to do

✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?

Good afternoon, dear sir/madam. My name is Anastassia. I bought the sleeping support device (Teddy bear) in your online shop two weeks ago. It was for my teenage daughter who is struggling with sleeping problems. So I'm writing

this

Linking Words

letter for the purpose of asking for your help and advice. You have to understand how important is it to me.

Firstly

Linking Words

, when I got the parcel, I recognized that the bear was not working. I tried to change the batteries, but it was not effective.

Moreover

Linking Words

, the bear was torn. My daughter was so upset, she had waited for

this

Linking Words

toy for a long time. I want to ask your company to send us a new toy, and I'm expecting

any

Correct determiner usage

show examples

compliment from you.

Otherwise

Linking Words

, it will be the greatest disappointment in our life and it will be reflected in our review of social media. Looking forward to hearing from you. Best regards, Anastassia.

anastasiaThu Aug 22 2024

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site's author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

suitable writing tone

Your letter is clear and the problems are well described, but try to use more formal language to make it sound more professional.

complete response

It might be helpful to specify the order number or some identifying information to make it easier for the company to locate your purchase.

greeting and closing

Your greeting and closing are appropriately polite and suit the formal tone of a complaint letter.

single idea per paragraph

Each paragraph focuses on a single idea, which helps to keep the letter clear and organized.

4
Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
0
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1
Grammar mistakes
detected issues

0123456789.0505

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 8.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 8.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

6 paragraphs

154 words

🚀 Prepare for IELTS writing section today!

Unlimited Task 1 & Task 2 checks
Practice with essays, charts, and letters.
Personalized suggestions & mistake analysis
Spot every mistake and boost your score.
Topic ideas & vocabulary helpers
Expand your ideas and use the right words.
Progress tracking
Watch your writing improve with every practice.

What to do next:

Look at other essays:

<4
band
You recently attended a meeting at a hotel. When you returned home, you found you had left some important papers at the hotel.
I am writing to this letter to inform you to our office staff leavs their job and their last day in the office is 17th October 2023. So I request to your we are arranged their ferwell party in their last day.
6
band
One of your friends recently had a birthday celebration,but you missed it and you forgot to tell your friend that you couldn't attend. Write a letter to your friend.In your letter Apologise for missing the birthday celebration Explain why you missed it and why you didn't tell your friend And day what you would like to do show that you are sorry
Hope you are doing well. I am writing an apology letter regarding the missed your birthday and I forgot to tell her that I couldn't attend.
5
band
In the past, when student did a university degree, they tended to study in their own country. Nowadays, they have more opportunity to study abroad. What are the advantages and disadvantages of these developments? You should use your own idea,knowledge and experience
In previous epoches, learn their preferred to study in their own area for graduating and university. however, these days student have more choices to study foreign country. My perspective is nowadays there are a lot of opportunity for students for improving their knowledge. Through studying abroad. They can find better situation or maybe better major for themselves.
7.5
band
It is a good idea to have large public spaces in towns and cities such as parks and squares. Do you agree or disagree? Why?
In this contemporary world, it is argued that having enormous public spaces like parks in cities is a great idea. I completely agree with this statement and in this essay, I will try to draw some conclusions.
7
band
Discipline is ever increasing probelm in modern schools. Some people think that discpline should be the responsibility of teachers, while others this that this is the role of parents. Discuss both sides and give your opinioon.
Discipline plays an indispensable role in every aspect of life, which, unfortunately, is a growing concern in the modern education system. While some people believe that teachers can more effectively discipline students, others argue that parents should take this responsibility. Nonetheless, I subscribe to the former view; in my perspective, interactive learning under the supervision of trained instructors in school provides invaluable disciplinary skills, which cannot be obtained at home. This essay will discuss why a set of society believes that teachers should be held responsible for disciplining students, and why others advocate against it.

You recently bought a toy from a company online. When the toy was delivered, you found some problems with it. Write a letter to the company manager. In your letter: -Describe the toy -Explain the problems with it -Tell the manager what you would like her/him to do

You recently attended a meeting at a hotel. When you returned home, you found you had left some important papers at the hotel.

In the past, when student did a university degree, they tended to study in their own country. Nowadays, they have more opportunity to study abroad. What are the advantages and disadvantages of these developments? You should use your own idea,knowledge and experience

It is a good idea to have large public spaces in towns and cities such as parks and squares. Do you agree or disagree? Why?

Discipline is ever increasing probelm in modern schools. Some people think that discpline should be the responsibility of teachers, while others this that this is the role of parents. Discuss both sides and give your opinioon.