Illiteracy continues to be a concern for many countries in the world today. What are the causes of illiteracy in the modern world, and what effects does it have on the people concerned and on society as a whole?

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In
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era, there are many obstacles in the path of
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world, low literacy rate is one of them. It has been a pressing issue
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many years.
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a few reasons and
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effects on
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society.
To begin
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is
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of awareness of
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of being educated. In fact, in many under-developed nations
people
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a wastage
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of time because they are unaware of the fact that reading can change their lives and uplift their living standards.
Secondly
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of infrastructure in many countries is
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another reason
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widespread
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of
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illiteracy. To illustrate,
according to
WHO in Africa many countries like Zambia, Angola etc. either
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not have
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school building or there are no tutors to teach.
Hence
,
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a major
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part of the population
is
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such
nations are illiterate.
Furthermore
, global economic inflation is
also
a major factor. It is a matter of fact, that quality
education
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has gone beyond the reach of common
people
because
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involved in looking after a family has increased
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in
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few decades.
This
problem has many unfavourable outcomes,
firstly
, uneducated
people
put extra financial burden on governments, as many illiterate
people
are unable to earn their living because most of them
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not have any professional skills
due to
lack
of
education
.
Therefore
, the rulers are taking care of
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of
such
people
in matters of food and health.
Secondly
,
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in
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rate is
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another outcome of the absence of learning.
For example
,
according to
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Crime Register in India, a number of culprits involved in criminal cases are uneducated and they were involved in
such
activities, in order to, earn some money for their families.
To sum up
, the
lack
of
education
is the outcome of
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of awareness and
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the absence
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of basic infrastructure. In return, it is disrupting
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social harmony and burdening the rulers to fulfil
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needs of the illiterate
people
by giving them food, medicines etc.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Literacy
  • Illiteracy
  • Poverty
  • Access
  • Educational resources
  • Social inequality
  • Discrimination
  • Gender disparity
  • Racial bias
  • Cultural norms
  • Technological advances
  • Political instability
  • Disruption
  • Education systems
  • Socioeconomic status
  • Job prospects
  • Health implications
  • Self-esteem
  • Empowerment
  • Economic growth
  • Social cohesion
  • Civic participation
  • Democratic processes
  • Exclusion
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