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The maps below show information about the change of Riverage college 30 years ago and now. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons

The maps below show information about the change of Riverage college 30 years ago and now. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons
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The two maps compare the design of Riverage
College
 30 years ago and how it appears at present after development.
Overall
, we can see the
college
 has undergone many changes today by establishing more facilities to make students feel convenient,
such
 as
music
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a music
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room
 and café. With a short glance at two maps, the difference between
two
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the two
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 times will
reveal
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be revealed
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. The green place of
Correct article usage
the college
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college
Add a verb
college is
college was
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 adjacent to
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the sport
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sport
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sports
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 hall, which was filled with flowers has been replaced with some steps.
Moreover
, the refractory department has been altered into an office, so four separate office departments located above the reception in the old layout have been combined with each other and an art-class
room
 is built now.
On the other hand
, a new café has been constructed exactly below the library which was a common
room
 before.
In addition
, a music
room
 has been added to the layout directly underneath the reception block. The space of parking
at the end
 of the
college
 has been eliminated and changed to a green space with trees.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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