You recently received a letter from a friend asking for advice about whether to go to college or to try to get a job. You think he/she should get a job. Write a letter to this friend. In your letter * say why he/she would not enjoy going to college * explain why getting a job is a good idea for him/her * suggest types of job that would be suitable for him/her
Dear Ali,
I hope you are very well. I am writing to you to share my thoughts on the decisions you'll make about your future.
First of all, I would like to state that knowing you care about my decisions and suggestions made me happy.
As for the topic, I think that getting a job is better than going to college. The reason why I think so is because of the education system in our country.
For example
, there are many unemployed graduates from the field of study you want. After these young people graduate, they can only find a job with the lowest salary. Therefore
, I think that you get a job and focus on your own work skills. For instance
, it is a fact that you are so good at trading, and in my opinion, you should be interested in trading.
I want you to know that I will be there for you whenever you need me. I hope these suggestions will be helpful. Please let me know the outcome of this
matter and your decision.
See you soon,
Sinan Y.Submitted by sinan_yalcindag27 on
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Expand on examples or reasons why Ali might not enjoy college specifically, beyond just mentioning the education system.
coherence cohesion
Try to provide more transitions between your ideas to enhance the flow, such as using connectors like 'Moreover', 'Furthermore', and 'In addition'.
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The tone of the letter is very suitable and friendly, fitting the context of giving advice to a friend.
coherence cohesion
You have concluded the letter well, which maintains a good structure and ensures that all the necessary parts of the letter are present.