You have seen an advertisement in an English newspaper for a job working in the City Museum shop during the holidays. You decide to apply for the job. Write a letter to the director of the Museum. In your letter: •introduce yourself •explain what experience and special skills you have •explain why you are interested in the job

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing

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letter to apply for the docent position at the City

Museum

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, which you advertised in the local newspaper

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weekend. Before I explain my experience and skills, I can give some information about myself briefly. I am Hwiju Jin who graduated from art university

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month. When I was a student, I learned various knowledge about kinds of art

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as painting, pictures and crafts.

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, I was born in South Korea and my family moved to Canada when I was 5 years old so I am bilingual. I can speak English and Korean fluently. What's more,

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I studying at the university, I worked at E

Museum

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and F gallery as a part-time docent for 2 years.

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, I can adopt the position quickly and I can explain the pictures or paintings to customers completely. When I worked at the

Museum

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, I got a good reputation from the customers and manager.

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, I exhibited my paintings and crafts at the university. Plus, I have a good communication skill so I can deal with customers without difficulties. The reason why I want to work at the City

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that is

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one of my goals. I love art painting and learning new skills and knowledge. If I work there, I will work hard. please let me know if you need more information about me. I am looking forward to hearing good news from you. Thank you. Yours sincerely, Hwiju Jin.

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coherence cohesion

Ensure each paragraph has a clear theme and purpose. Your letter does well to separate topics into paragraphs, but some could focus more sharply on specific points.

coherence cohesion

For cohesion, try to vary your transitions between paragraphs more for a smoother flow, using phrases like 'In addition to this,' 'Furthermore,' or 'Not only... but also.'

task achievement

While your response mostly aligns with the task requirements, consider adding more specific examples of your special skills and how they would benefit the museum, particularly with an international audience.

task achievement

Your letter's tone is appropriate for the situation, but slight adjustments to formal language use and avoiding contractions ('I am' instead of 'I'm') could further improve its suitability.

Structure your letter

A letter needs to be written using a proper format, including the following:

A greeting (Dear sir/madam, Dear John, Dear Mr. Smith)
The main body (consisting of paragraphs for each part of the letter)
A closing (Yours sincerely, Yours faithfully, Best wishes, Kind regards, Love)

When writing a letter as part of the IELTS General Training Writing Task 1, it is important to include the bullet points presented to you in the question.

All three bullet points need to be presented. And remember that some bullet points contain more than one element. So, make sure to watch for ‘and’ and plurals.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 9.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

10 paragraphs

248 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

Dear Director,
enthusiastic applicant
pursuing a degree in
customer service experience
volunteer work
multilingual
cash handling
POS systems
team player
punctual
excellent communicator
cultural enthusiast
part-time position
professional references available
at your earliest convenience

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